Last week, I talked about verbs which masquerade as other parts of speech. For the sake of being thorough and keeping things together for our new readers, I'm bringing Perry Participle back for another round. If you read this last year, you're free to decide whether the refresher will benefit you or no.
Showing posts with label participial phrases. Show all posts
Showing posts with label participial phrases. Show all posts
When Verbs Go Incognito: Participles, Gerunds, and Infinitives
'Ello, loves.
Today's Get Your Grammar Fix(ed) features three infiltrators.
Sometimes, verbs be sneaky. They masquerade as other parts of speech, sneaking into adjectival and adverbial roles, relishing the danger and inherent risk of undercover work. They look like verbs, but they play other roles:
Participles.
Gerunds.
Infinitives.
I won't take long.
Participles are verb forms with either progressive -ing endings or past -ed endings. They function as adjectives.
Watch a transformation.
Short Son's imagination enthralls me.
Simple present active verb
Short Son's story-telling is enthralling too.
Present participle acting as an adjective, describing his story-telling
Enthralled, I listen to Short Son as he describes Sky Dancers.
Past participle, describing me as I listen
Enthralled by the depth of character and back story his nine-year-old mind can generate, Giant and I take notes.
Past participle introducing an entire participial phrase. These can be useful, but participial phrases can also be weasels. Don't say I didn't warn you.
Gerunds are verbs used as nouns. They end in -ing, and they can do just about anything a noun can do. I mean, they aren't going to function as a noun of direct address unless some Hollywood star names their child Believing or Dancing or I'm-Not-Wise-about-Naming, but I digress.
Brainstorming story ideas with my Giant is a favorite pastime.
But with hours on our hands, our family enjoys walking, playing board games, and re-watching favorite episodes of Doctor Who.
Infinitives consist of "to" plus the most basic form of the verb. Anything nouns can do, they can do...in a similar fashion. But they can also act as adjectives and adverbs, so look out. Since fiction writers are not oft called on to diagram sentences, I'll spare you the gory details.
One day, I want to live (noun)in a log cabin where I have a cozy space to read (adj), an energizing place to write (adj), a kitchen big enough to feed (adv) a family full of grandkids. But for now, I'll settle for a tiny cozy office in a crowded house full of love and noise.
All three of these--participles, gerunds, and infinitives--can add a little diversity to your writing. When you notice that your sentence structure feels and sounds repetitive, try replacing some common phrasing with one of these. But--as with any phrasing and wording combos--too much is too much.
Variety is the spice of fiction. You don't have to be a grammar nerd like me, but know the rules well enough to make a conscious decision about what's best for your sentence, paragraph, page, tone, mood, character's voice...I could go on ad nauseum.
PLAY with words.
Thanks for swinging by,
And thanks to Emory Allen, Caden Crawford, and Miles Harrison for the excellent images!
Today's Get Your Grammar Fix(ed) features three infiltrators.
Sometimes, verbs be sneaky. They masquerade as other parts of speech, sneaking into adjectival and adverbial roles, relishing the danger and inherent risk of undercover work. They look like verbs, but they play other roles:
Participles.
Gerunds.
Infinitives.
I won't take long.
Participles are verb forms with either progressive -ing endings or past -ed endings. They function as adjectives.
Watch a transformation.
Short Son's imagination enthralls me.
Simple present active verb
Short Son's story-telling is enthralling too.
Present participle acting as an adjective, describing his story-telling
Enthralled, I listen to Short Son as he describes Sky Dancers.
Past participle, describing me as I listen
Enthralled by the depth of character and back story his nine-year-old mind can generate, Giant and I take notes.
Past participle introducing an entire participial phrase. These can be useful, but participial phrases can also be weasels. Don't say I didn't warn you.
Gerunds are verbs used as nouns. They end in -ing, and they can do just about anything a noun can do. I mean, they aren't going to function as a noun of direct address unless some Hollywood star names their child Believing or Dancing or I'm-Not-Wise-about-Naming, but I digress.
Brainstorming story ideas with my Giant is a favorite pastime.
But with hours on our hands, our family enjoys walking, playing board games, and re-watching favorite episodes of Doctor Who.
Infinitives consist of "to" plus the most basic form of the verb. Anything nouns can do, they can do...in a similar fashion. But they can also act as adjectives and adverbs, so look out. Since fiction writers are not oft called on to diagram sentences, I'll spare you the gory details.
One day, I want to live (noun)in a log cabin where I have a cozy space to read (adj), an energizing place to write (adj), a kitchen big enough to feed (adv) a family full of grandkids. But for now, I'll settle for a tiny cozy office in a crowded house full of love and noise.
All three of these--participles, gerunds, and infinitives--can add a little diversity to your writing. When you notice that your sentence structure feels and sounds repetitive, try replacing some common phrasing with one of these. But--as with any phrasing and wording combos--too much is too much.
Variety is the spice of fiction. You don't have to be a grammar nerd like me, but know the rules well enough to make a conscious decision about what's best for your sentence, paragraph, page, tone, mood, character's voice...I could go on ad nauseum.
PLAY with words.
Thanks for swinging by,
And thanks to Emory Allen, Caden Crawford, and Miles Harrison for the excellent images!
Get Your Grammar Fix(ed): Participial Phrases Can Be Weasels.
Cute, fuzzy stealth. That's what weasels are about.
When we're not paying attention, sometimes even when we ARE, participial phrases convince us they're the best candidate for the job. They weasel their way in and tempt our trust.
And on the surface, these participial weasels might look cute. But they lie and do not the truth.
Now, I've known many perfectly genial and cooperative participial phrases, so I'm not going to generalize. Suffice it to say, you need to be wary. Use discernment. Don't fall for a fuzzy face and big, sweet eyes.
Here's a conversation I had with one as I wrote recently:
Me: This sentence is boring.
Participle Perry: Show me. Look at my round, soulful eyes. I want to know.
Me: Okay. Here.
I write in my office as my kids play in the next room.
PP: *snore*
Me: Perry!
PP: What? Oh, you were...yeah. That's pretty pathetic. Nobody will even care. What separates you from the other writing mothers out there? Not. A. Thing. And in this business, you've got to stand out somehow.
Me: All right! Quit with the critique and help me then.
PP: What if I jump in there and liven it up a bit. I'm cute enough. Let me give it a whirl. *blinks adorable eyes*
Me: Aw. Okay.
PP: *wiggles in* Here's your new sentence.
Laughing maniacally, I write in my office as my kids play in the next room.
Me: Wait. Maybe my kids should be the ones laughing.
PP: Sure, I'll move over. Get closer to the Littles. How 'bout now?
I write in my office, laughing maniacally, as my kids play in the next room.
Me: I see what you did there.
PP: Heh. Caught that, did ya? I'm right here, you know. I see who's maniacal.
Me: You're WAY overstepping, dude. Keep moving.
PP: Fine.
I write in my office as my kids, laughing maniacally, play in the next room.
Or I can slide to the end. I'm cute anywhere.
Me: No, you're good there. Shut up and hold still.
Pay careful attention to ANYTHING that ends with -ing. Here are a few key rules.
First, be sure that, since -ing is the progressive form of the verb, the action is meant to be continuous. If it's something that happened once, you don't need the -ing.
Jerrifica whistled and scanned the edge of the forest.
What? I was in the mood for an unusual name. Still, you've got to admit it paints a different picture than:
Jerrifica, whistling, scanned the edge of the forest.
Sentence A makes Terrifica Jerrifica sound like she's just arrived at a clandestine meeting and given the secret signal. Sentence B? Not so much. Maybe looking for her favorite bird?
Second, don't use -ing if the two verbs in the sentence can't happen simultaneously.
Alfonzebub, getting dressed as fast as possible, ran down the steps to the bus stop.
Um, no. Dude needs to put clothes on before he leaves his apartment. And even if it's possible for him to get dressed as he runs, your readers don't want to see it.
Third, don't overuse participial phrases. On the surface, they look like a nice way to change sentence structure and infuse variety. Hey, they're full of action. But remember, when you overuse anything, it gets tiresome. Instead of adding to your writing repertoire, you might instead provide yourself a new pet weasel.
And no writer wants another weasel word. Or phrase. Or any kind of weasel at all.
Thanks to Elysium 2010 and Steve Richmond for the images.
When we're not paying attention, sometimes even when we ARE, participial phrases convince us they're the best candidate for the job. They weasel their way in and tempt our trust.
And on the surface, these participial weasels might look cute. But they lie and do not the truth.
Now, I've known many perfectly genial and cooperative participial phrases, so I'm not going to generalize. Suffice it to say, you need to be wary. Use discernment. Don't fall for a fuzzy face and big, sweet eyes.
Here's a conversation I had with one as I wrote recently:
Me: This sentence is boring.
Participle Perry: Show me. Look at my round, soulful eyes. I want to know.
Me: Okay. Here.
I write in my office as my kids play in the next room.
PP: *snore*
Me: Perry!
PP: What? Oh, you were...yeah. That's pretty pathetic. Nobody will even care. What separates you from the other writing mothers out there? Not. A. Thing. And in this business, you've got to stand out somehow.
Me: All right! Quit with the critique and help me then.
PP: What if I jump in there and liven it up a bit. I'm cute enough. Let me give it a whirl. *blinks adorable eyes*
Me: Aw. Okay.
PP: *wiggles in* Here's your new sentence.
Laughing maniacally, I write in my office as my kids play in the next room.
Me: Wait. Maybe my kids should be the ones laughing.
PP: Sure, I'll move over. Get closer to the Littles. How 'bout now?
I write in my office, laughing maniacally, as my kids play in the next room.
Me: I see what you did there.
PP: Heh. Caught that, did ya? I'm right here, you know. I see who's maniacal.
Me: You're WAY overstepping, dude. Keep moving.
PP: Fine.
I write in my office as my kids, laughing maniacally, play in the next room.
Or I can slide to the end. I'm cute anywhere.
Me: No, you're good there. Shut up and hold still.
Pay careful attention to ANYTHING that ends with -ing. Here are a few key rules.
First, be sure that, since -ing is the progressive form of the verb, the action is meant to be continuous. If it's something that happened once, you don't need the -ing.
Jerrifica whistled and scanned the edge of the forest.
What? I was in the mood for an unusual name. Still, you've got to admit it paints a different picture than:
Jerrifica, whistling, scanned the edge of the forest.
Sentence A makes Terrifica Jerrifica sound like she's just arrived at a clandestine meeting and given the secret signal. Sentence B? Not so much. Maybe looking for her favorite bird?
Second, don't use -ing if the two verbs in the sentence can't happen simultaneously.
Alfonzebub, getting dressed as fast as possible, ran down the steps to the bus stop.
Um, no. Dude needs to put clothes on before he leaves his apartment. And even if it's possible for him to get dressed as he runs, your readers don't want to see it.
Third, don't overuse participial phrases. On the surface, they look like a nice way to change sentence structure and infuse variety. Hey, they're full of action. But remember, when you overuse anything, it gets tiresome. Instead of adding to your writing repertoire, you might instead provide yourself a new pet weasel.
And no writer wants another weasel word. Or phrase. Or any kind of weasel at all.
Thanks to Elysium 2010 and Steve Richmond for the images.
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